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Topic: quick grammatical question

Anonymous a66825e016b68884f1b22960d56b4386 started this discussion 1 month (2008-10-14 07:17:18 UTC) ago:

In this passage:
Upon initially viewing this image, my eyes were immediately drawn to the bars covering the holes of the tree, making it seem like a cage. However, I found it weird how the bars were trapping nothing but a bright light emanating from behind the tree.

Should the first period (after 'cage') be changed to a semicolon, or are the two similar thoughts grammatically & correctly able to be in two separate sentences?
Also, should the second "the tree" be omitted, replaced with "it", since it can be seen as redundant?

Thanks!

Anonymous 48cc9b1dfd74b19a0b637def82ff2c6f replied with this 1 month (2008-10-14 07:21:08 UTC) ago, 4 minutes later (#69,643):

1. "Upon initially" is redundant.
2. Forget the semi-colon and omission.

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